The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart reveals the average temperatures in a year of three main cities from three different regions:
Paris
in Europe,
Dubai
in the Middle East, and
Sydney
in Australia.
Overall
, it is obvious that the temperatures in
Paris
and
Sydney
are
in contrast
; they are from two opposite hemispheres,
while
the trend of those in
Dubai
is similar to those in
Paris
but much higher, especially in August. The average temperature in
Paris
rises gradually from 5 in January to 20 degrees in July and stays stable for a month before dropping down to the same level at 5 Celcius in December.
This
resembles
Dubai
but the hottest month is August when the warmth can reach 35
Celsius
in spite of the cooler weather in January, accounting for 20
Celsius
.
However
, the weather tends to cool down to 25 in November and again at 20 Celcius in December. Interestingly, in
Sydney
, Australia, the temperature does not correspond to that in
Paris
. in January, the temperature starts at 25
Celsius
and comes down to the lowest level of 15
Celsius
in July before rising consistently to nearly 25
Celsius
in December. In conclusion, the climate of
Paris
and
Sydney
goes in the opposite direction, but the conditions in
Dubai
tend to stay warm and could be hot throughout the year.
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