The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is by providing free public transport in 24 hours per day, and seven days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, traffic jams have become familiar in cities around the world.
This
has caused many responses
such
as the government should provide public
transportation
for free and buses should be scheduled 24/7 continuously every day. Based on my viewpoint, I completely disagree with the above opinion. The main reason is
because
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besides
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the immediate convenience that public services bring, it
also
brings many inconveniences that I will list in my essay. Specifically, public transport, when applied in real life, will
also
have traffic incidents that disrupt their schedules. On top of that, when one of those vehicles has a problem and is delayed, it wastes the
time
of the customers who are using it.
In addition
, for countries with high population density
such
as China or America, it is extremely difficult to fully introduce public
transportation
for use in daily life. The main reason is
because
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when the government provides too much public
transportation
to meet the needs of citizens, traffic jams on major roads are inevitable.
For example
, workers need to be at the company at 8:00 am and they need to work enough office hours to get their full salary. Meanwhile, if the public
transportation
they are using has a problem on the way, they will waste a large amount of
time
traveling
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between home and work.
Furthermore
, the workers' wages will be reduced because of
this
unwanted delay.
Additionally
, if people in the city spend a large amount of money to own a vehicle, it means that in the future when they no longer need to use that vehicle, they can resell it as a vehicle. personal property.
On the contrary
, if individuals choose to use public
transportation
for a long period of
time
, it is obvious that
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free
transportation
will be deducted from their salary.
This
means they will lose a recurring fee for their own travel and
this
fee will never be recovered.
Moreover
, the government will face cost difficulties when having to provide adequate public facilities for all places where people live and work.
In addition
, these tools take a long
time
to produce enough to be used in real life. In general, 100% free public transport services
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impossible in today's society. To explain
this
problem, before people's travel can be replaced with public services,
gevernment
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government
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countless important problems that need to be resolved and overcome.
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