You recently encountered some problems with a public transportation service in your area. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company and say - where and what the problems were - explain how these problems affect the public - suggest what changes could be made to improve the situation

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing a letter to inform some issues that we encountered in using public transportation within our area at Naracoorte company.

This

problem we face

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now in our community at Teyes Brothers. The workers

they

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may be able not to go and work

due to

the broken

transport

however

; we

try

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warm

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warn

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the driver to report the issues

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with

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the public

transport

yet he never did report the problem.

In addition

that

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face a lot of things that

affecting

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our

job

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and school

especially

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for

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our children. One main

issues

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issue

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now that the public

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encountered

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is not

to go and

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shopping for our food and

that is

the main need

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our family. I am suggesting if the council buy a spare public

transport

for the community and if

this

case

occur

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again

then

there is no more problem for the people in the area because they know that there will be

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transport

a means of transport

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transport

. I appreciate your time and let me know if you have any more questions regarding

these issue

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. Yours' Faithfully, Tokateti Totoki

Submitted by riemwatokateti on Sat Sep 23 2023

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task response

Ensure that the letter addresses all the key points mentioned in the prompt, and provide specific details about the problems faced with public transportation.

coherence and cohesion

The greeting and closing need to be more formal and suitable for a business letter. Avoid using generic openings and closings like 'Dear Sir/Madam' and 'Yours Faithfully.'

lexical resource

Improve the range and accuracy of vocabulary used. Use specific and appropriate terms related to public transportation and problem-solving.

grammatical range

Work on sentence structure, punctuation, and grammar to convey ideas clearly and accurately. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and sentence construction.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Grammar mistakes
 

9 paragraphs

184 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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