The 3 pie charts illustrate the rate of 4 types of transport are driven in the United Kingdom in 1996, 1985 and 2005.

The 3 pie charts illustrate the rate of 4 types of transport are driven in the United Kingdom in 1996, 1985 and 2005.
The provided information illustrates the predominant factors and challenges for
travel
faced by US citizens in the year 2009.
Overall
, it is evident that ‘To and from work’ accounted for the primary purpose of commuting,
whereas
the least proportion of people
travel
to visit their pals and relatives.
In contrast
, the ‘price of
travel
’ was one of the significant issues suffered by the US public, followed by other concerns
such
as safety, aggressive drivers, highway congestion, access to public transport, and space for pedestrians. As depicted in the bar chart, the most noteworthy observation is that just under half of the people commute ‘To and from work’, as represented by the percentages,
while
only 19% of individuals preferred to commute for their ‘personal reasons’.
Furthermore
, one-fifth part of the proportion
travel
for ‘shopping’, followed by only 10 per cent for ‘social and recreational’ activities, and only a small number of individuals chose to ‘visit friends and relatives’.
On the other hand
, the pie chart shows the majority of Americans suffered
travel
issues
due to
the high prices (the price of
travel
),
while
, nearly one-third expressed ‘safety concerns’. There was a minimal difference between ‘aggressive drivers’ and ‘highway congestions’.
Additionally
, space for pedestrians was
also
2 per cent less than ‘access to public transport’.
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