The line graph below shows the population size, birth and death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the population size, birth and death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied data table describes the
population
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size,
birth
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and
death
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rates
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on
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England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. As a general trend, the
population
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size
rate
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increased overwhelmingly after the 19th century in England and Wales.
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, the
death
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rates
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rate
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declined after 1800
started
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,
while
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the
birth
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rate
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after 1950 went upward. It could be noticed that the
population
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size of England and Wales started at approximately 3
million
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in 1700,
then
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after 50 years the
population
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rate
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went as high as 10
million
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. During the next 50
years
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the
population
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rate
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declined to nearly 3
million
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in 1800. Again after 50 years, it increased from nearly 3
million
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up to 10
million
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in 1850.
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, that year, the
rate
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rapidly increased to almost 45
million
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people
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in 1900.
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, in the following
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the
rate
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reached 50
million
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in 2000. The
birth
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rate
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and
death
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followed
the
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a
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similar trend from 1700 to 1950.
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1700 to 1750, an
increased
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was seen in both of these
rates
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. The
birth
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was rose from 30 to 40 per
1000
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1,000
people
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while
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the
death
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rate
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increased from around 27 to almost 37 per
1000
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1,000
people
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. From 1750 to 1800 the
rate
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mode was steady for both
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birth
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and
death
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reaching an all-time low of
round
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around
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20 per thousand
people
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by 1950. From that year, the sharp increase in the
birth
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rate
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begins
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climbing to roughly 34 per 1000 folks in 2000.
In contrast
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, the
death
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rates
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plateaued from 1950 to 2000.
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,
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population
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the population
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rate
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increased
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of
skyrocketing
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the skyrocketing
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birth
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rate
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and stabilized
death
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rate
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. In 2000 the
birth
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rate
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in the UK was as high as 34,
while
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the
death
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rate
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was 20.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, birth, death, rates, rate, million, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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