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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Write at least 205 words.

#university #students #subjects #addition #time #attention #qualification
It is true that many Students going to university prefer learning extra
subjects
 with
subjects
 that they chose for getting a qualification others think that it is necessary to concentrate on
main
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the main
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subjects
 and learning
of
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secondary
subjects
 is not needed.
While
 preparing
in
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for
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 the important
subjects
 for going to future work plays a big role, I believe that other
subjects
 can
also
 have benefits for individuals. There are some advantages
of
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to
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 studying a lot of
subjects
.
To begin
 with, learning only
main
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the main
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subjects
 can become boring for students.
Subjects
,
such
 as maths, physics, chemistry and other sciences with each
time
 start to be difficult for University students because there are a lot of aspects like analyzing the process,
doing
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and doing
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 research which have
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apply
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a large impact
to
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on
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 people's
brain
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brains
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.
Moreover
, if extra
subjects
 are not necessary
in
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for
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 qualification, they can be useful in other daily routines. Some
subjects
 like art or
technologies
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technology
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 will help individuals illuminate ,
for example
, the future house or build something.
In
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As
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result
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a result
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,
person
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a person
the person
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 can achieve all his goals.
However
, there are some negative sides of
addition
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adding
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 some
subjects
. One of these is that students’ timetable gets to be activity -
filld
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filled
field
 and they haven't got free
time
 for their hobbies and other things.
Consequently
, they will be tired.
After
this
, studying extra
subjects
 is not appropriate for people who cannot collect all
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
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 in their
mind
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minds
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. During the university exams, they can forget something important. because with their timetable
time
 for preparing
to test
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for tests
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 with less. So, sometimes studying secondary
subjects
 can be
waste
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a waste
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 of
time
.
To sum up
, adding extra lessons will
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be
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good
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a good
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 variant for
gain
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gaining
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 some new
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
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, but ,
on the other hand
. it can have
negative
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a negative
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 effect
to
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on
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future
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the future
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 iob of
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the individual
an individual
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individual
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individuals
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.
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