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Your English teacher has found a new penfriend for you

#english #teacher #penfriend
Hi John, My English teacher told me you are looking for a penfriend, so here I am. My name is Dima. I'
m
 from Istanbul. We are living here with my wife and two Oriental Shorthair cats. I'
m
 working remotely as a contractor developer in two companies in California. Despite
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working tasks are boring sometimes, I like both my jobs because of the relaxed atmosphere and pretty good salary. I'
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 a big fan of short trips, especially on commuter trains and ferries. So, if I have time during the week, I usually go somewhere by these kinds of
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public transport. One more passion is photography. I have a Fujifilm XT-30 camera with a kit
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 lens, and I'
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 in love with
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 capacity
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plain old analogue photos. Mostly I'
m
 keen on industrial
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. Trainspotting and flightspotting are
also
 my kind of fun.
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, non-spontaneous photoshoots of people aren't interesting to me at all. That's, probably, it for now. How about you? I'd be happy to know something about your ways of having fun. I'
m
 looking forward to getting to know you better. Best regards Dima.
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