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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 bar chart illustrates the first ten countries for the electricity
production
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 and use in the or year of 2014. We can see here,
the
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 country
produce
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 more, they consume more. The rate is about to equal and there is a little spare always for each country. Here, China was the top producer with 5398
billion
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kwh
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kWh
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they consumed almost all of the
production
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.
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, The United States made 4099
billion
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kwh
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kWh
 and used 3866
billion
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kwh
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kWh
. The only country except these two is Russia which produced more than 1000
billion
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kwh
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kWh
 and the sum was 1057. They almost spend all of the produced electricity. There are 7
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more
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 countries in
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 chart and their
production
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 was under 1000
billion
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kwh
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kWh
. Japan added 936.2
billion
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Kwh
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kWh
 in their electricity sector and used 856.7
billion
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kwh
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kWh
. India was able to save more than 100
billion
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kwh
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kWh
where
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whereas
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canada
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Canada
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 saved nearly 119
billion
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kwh
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kWh
. France was unable to keep their savings over 100
billion
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kwh
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kWh
 and Brazil saved a little bit. Germany is
a
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 exception here. They showed a higher consumption rate than their
production
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 rate but the statistics
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 not much higher. Korea produced the lowest amount of
electric
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 supply in
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 chart and spared a tinu amount after using.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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