the chart below shows the value of one country export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in value of export in 2016
The bar graph below compares the worth of five different categories of a country's exports in
Change the article
the year
year
2015 and 2016. Fix the agreement mistake
years
Also
there is a table illustrating the relative change in their values during Add a comma
,Also
this
period.
We can see that products
differentiated from oil and goods
produced by engineers has
brought the most money for the state. Change the verb form
have
Whereas
, agricultural products
and textiles were among the least profitable exports.
Looking at the bar chart, goods
produced from petroleum were the only goods
to value more than 60 billion dollars in 2015 while
in 2016, they were able to make the same amount of money from their engineered creations too. Comparing both of these categories of products
, we notice that the engineering products
' figures increased more than they did for petroleum goods
, 8.5 and 3 per cent respectively.
On the other hand
, outcomes
of Correct article usage
the outcomes
textile
industry grew the most with more than 15 per cent and in 2016, they almost matched the money made by agriculture, which stayed almost the same during Add an article
the textile
this
period of time. However
, the only category to see its revenues reduced was jewelleries which dropped by a little over 5 per cent in 2016.Submitted by parham.moonesi on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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