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the charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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In the following pie charts, are presented the percentages
in
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of
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 three types of nutrients (sodium, saturated fat and
sugar
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) in different types of meals that are
eten
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eaten
 in America. As an
overal
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overall
 trend, sodium and saturated fat are
moslty
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mostly
 used during dinner,
while
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sugar
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 is considered to be the
mosr
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most
 valuable ingredient in
snacks
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. It can be clearly
senn
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seen
 that supper
tend
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tends
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 to be salty and with
high
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a high
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amound
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amount
amounts
 of fat, 43% and 37%
respectfuly
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respectively
,
whereas
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snacks
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had
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apply
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included mainly
sugar
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 as it appeared well under 50% (42%).
Additionally
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, sodium
tend
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tends
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 to be the
lest
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least
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prederable
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preferable
 element of brunch and
also
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snacks's
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snacks'
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 meals as each one
have
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has
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 reached 14%.
Furthermore
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, fat and
sugar
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seems
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seem
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 to have the lowest number in
consuption
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consumption
 during the first meal of the day, at about 16%. Especially during lunch, salt and fat
heve
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have
 reached about 29%
adn
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and
 26% respectfully, when glucose
were
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was
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 just under 20% (19%). In conclusion, we can see that salt and fat are mostly used during the night food,
in contrast
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 with added
sugar
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 which is most
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commonly
comonly
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commonly
appeared
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apply
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in
snacks
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, snacks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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