the charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In the following pie charts, are presented the percentages
in
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three types of nutrients (sodium, saturated fat and
sugar
) in different types of meals that are
eten
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eaten
in America. As an
overal
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overall
trend, sodium and saturated fat are
moslty
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mostly
used during dinner,
while
sugar
is considered to be the
mosr
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most
valuable ingredient in
snacks
. It can be clearly
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seen
that supper
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to be salty and with
high
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amound
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amount
amounts
of fat, 43% and 37%
respectfuly
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respectively
,
whereas
snacks
had
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included mainly
sugar
as it appeared well under 50% (42%).
Additionally
, sodium
tend
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to be the
lest
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prederable
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preferable
element of brunch and
also
snacks's
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meals as each one
have
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reached 14%.
Furthermore
, fat and
sugar
seems
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to have the lowest number in
consuption
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consumption
during the first meal of the day, at about 16%. Especially during lunch, salt and fat
heve
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have
reached about 29%
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and
26% respectfully, when glucose
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just under 20% (19%). In conclusion, we can see that salt and fat are mostly used during the night food,
in contrast
with added
sugar
which is most
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commonly
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commonly
appeared
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in
snacks
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, snacks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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