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The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
grapics
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graph
 illustrates the changes in food
consumption
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 by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010, in
grams
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 per person per week. Observably, fish was the most consumed food throughout the
period
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, followed by
meat
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 and
salt
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.Fish
consumption
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 increased from 600
grams
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 in 1985 to 700
grams
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 in 1990, and
then
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 remained relatively stable until 2005. In the
last
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 five years of the
period
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, fish
consumption
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 increased again to reach 850
grams
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 in 2010.
Meat
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consumption
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also
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 increased steadily over the
period
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, from 100
grams
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 in 1985 to 200
grams
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 in 2010.
Salt
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consumption
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,
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, decreased significantly over the
period
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, from 500
grams
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 in 1985 to 200
grams
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 in 2010. The gap between
meat
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 and
salt
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consumption
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 narrowed significantly over the
period
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. In 1985,
salt
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consumption
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 was five times higher than
meat
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consumption
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. By 2010,
salt
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consumption
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 was only equal to
meat
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consumption
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.
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, the changes in food
consumption
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 in China have been positive. Chinese people are now eating more nutritious foods and less
salt
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, which has led to an improvement in their health and life expectancy.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, grams, period, meat, salt with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Food consumption trends
  • Per capita
  • Staple foods
  • Diet diversification
  • Protein-rich meals
  • Economic development
  • Stable or declining trend
  • Nutritional transition
  • Dietary shifts
  • Global averages
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