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Task 1 : Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graphs below. Write at least 150 words.

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The pie charts
compares
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 the highest level achieved by
women
 in
someland
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some land
homeland
 in two different years over a 50-year period It is noticeable that
women
 received a much higher level of
education
 in
someland
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some land
homeland
 in 1995 than they did in 1945 In 1945, the proportion of
women
completed
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 their secondary
education
 accounted for 35% which was roughly equal to the proportion of
women
 with no schooling .
However
, no
women
 had completed post-graduate studies.
This
 situation had changed significantly by 1995. In 1995, the figure for
women
had
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 completed secondary
education
 was 20% which
equal
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 to the percentage of
women
had
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who had
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 gone to
post graduate
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postgraduate
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 studies . By 1995 ,
women
 were completing lower secondary
although
 10% ended their schooling at
this
 point.
This
 is in stark contrast with 1945 when only 30% of girls completed primary school, 35% had no schooling at all and 35% only completed the third grade. In conclusion, we can see that in the 50 years from 1945 to 1995 there have been huge positive developments
to
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 the
education
 levels of
women
 in
Someland
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Homeland
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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