The line graph illustrates the percentage of inhabitants aged 65 and older in three different nations (USA, Sweden and Japan) between 1940 and its prediction in 2040.

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the 65-year-old

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and older residents

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per cent

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in the USA, Sweden and Japan between 1940 and 2040 with a prediction.

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, the provided data shows that the USA and Sweden had their most drops in 1940 and they will face significant growth in the elderly population in 2040.

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Japan's proportion of the population aged 65 and over had the fewest majority over the period shown but it is expected that it will grow to more than 25% and become the country with

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elderly people in 2040 compared to others. Both the USA and Swedish elder population had a dramatic rise between 1940 and 1980.

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this

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, the segment of Swedish elderly gradually decreased in 2000 before

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sharp increase over two decades.

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, the number of old people in America steadily fell between 1980 and 2020 but it will be reached more than 20% in 2040.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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The line graph illustrates the percentage of inhabitants aged 65 and older in three different nations (USA, Sweden and Japan) between 1940 and its prediction in 2040.

Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Overpopulation is the world's most serious environmental problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The most important education for students should be conducted in classroom，not out of the classroom.

Many people realize that people living in the 21st century generally have a better quality of lives than people born in earlier centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?