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Many people work long time, lesving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or disadvantages?

There are many people who tend to more
times
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they
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apply
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at
work
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 and spend
short
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a short
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time
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 in their free
time
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in my opinion
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, in my opinion,
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 there are some advantages for them and they employ your life was more disadvantages for
them
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their
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specialty
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speciality
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.
However
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, spending
time
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 in leisure activities can help
the
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apply
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people to increase their
applicable
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applicability
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, but many of them avoid considering
in
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it
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. On the one hand, they do not identify it
is
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as
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 more useful for their
employer
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 than themselves. it is that, when their
employer
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observe
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observes
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 their employee prefer to stay at
work
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 or want to have short
time
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 for their leisure
activity
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, surely they would
more
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be more
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 satisfied. Because, doing the plants of their company would be sooner, because of attendance their
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co worker
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co-worker
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premanently
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permanently
 at
work
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 or break the
time
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work
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 shortly.
Also
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, one main
benefits
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benefit
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 for
employee
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employees
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 is the more have
activity
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 at
work
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, the
more
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higher
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 rais salary and income.
Furthermore
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, these
kind
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kinds
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 of
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co workers
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co-workers
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are
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is
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 more popular
for
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with
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 their
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employer
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employers
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, because of lower their
request
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requests
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 in
furlight
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flight
. From point of my view, these benefits are unavailable
ignore
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apply
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to
employee
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employees
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likewise
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employer
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employers
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.
On the other hand
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, attention to the advantages of less
activity
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 in free
time
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 can be considered in their consequences
in
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on co-workers '
co
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 worker's
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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. These days, having some entertainment
are
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is
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 so crucial for everyone, especially,
who
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those who
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 have hard
work
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 or a lot times
work
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. Because
,
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apply
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 their
healthy
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health
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related
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is related
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 to the methods that they use
it
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apply
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in their
work
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 or life.
For instance
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, lack of leisure or considered short
time
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 for it can increase
healthy
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health
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 problems,
such
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 as depression, disappointment and develop some pins in their body.
It's
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mean
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means
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 is we can encourage and persevere our physical and mental by planning
a
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apply
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sufficient
activity
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 in during our
time
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work
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of work
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.
For example
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, spending
along
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a long
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time
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 near a gorgeous beach or climbing
on
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apply
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a magnificent mountains
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a magnificent mountain
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 even though playing with our family in a happy picnic
on
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in
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 a jungle. In my opinion, reducing free
time
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activity
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 can be harmful
in
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to
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 our healthy lifestyle. So, if we
cosider
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consider
 its consequences , our
live
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lives
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 and
work
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 would be more satisfied. In conclusion, ignoring the effects of free
time
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activity
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 in
live
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life
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 and
work
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 would
be prevented
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prevent
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innovating
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innovation
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 and creative
of
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apply
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co-workers
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co workers
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co-workers
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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