The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Japan’s population: past, present and future trends.

The chart and  table below give information about population figures in Japan.

Japan’s population: past, present and future trends.
The bar chart below compares the
population
of
Japan
from 1950 until today and
also
illustrates estimations of
this
figure
until 2055.
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data about the same information with a focus on the
population
of
people
over 65 years old.
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Overall
, we can see that the figures for the
population
of
Japan
is
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predicted to tremendously decline between 2015 and 2055.
Furthermore
, we're witnessing the rise of
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elderly's
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population
. Looking at the bar chart,
Japan
had just over 84
million
citizens in 1950. It continued rising in
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the figure
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until it peaked at almost 128
million
in 2005 where it started to decrease slowly.
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the predictions,
Japan
will lose over 35
million
of its
population
between 2015 and 2055, almost 30
million
of which
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to the second half of that period. Focusing on the table,
Japan
had a little under 5 per cent of its
population
in the ages above 65 years, with only 4.1
million
old
people
. By the year
of
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2005,
this
figure
had
rose
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to 20 per cent of the
population
and over 25
million
people
were
then
, elderly.
This
trend is predicted to continue until 2035 and
also
, 2055 when respectively, 34 and 41 per cent of its
population
are over 65 years.
However
, we will see the
population
of elder
people
fall just by 0.7
million
between 2035 and 2055, even though in relative terms their
figure
will still grow.
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