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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph and pie charts illustrate the distribution of the
crimes
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 by type and
age
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 of people who committed illegal acts in the United Kingdom in the
last
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 year. The main fact that stands out is that the most amount of violations were committed by people between 16 and 28
years
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 old. Violent
crimes
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 were almost half of the total amount per year. Teenagers by the
age
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 of 12 were involved in 5000 cases. Young people of 16 and 20
years
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 old were responsible for 70 and 80 thousands of illegal activities respectively. The trend started going down afterwards and 60000 violations were committed by
24
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24-year-olds
years
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 old. The number significantly dropped down to 20000 by the
age
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 of 28
years
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 and consistently reduced with
age
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. The distribution by types of crime exhibits that almost half of
crimes
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 were violent. Property and drug
crimes
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 were 2 times less compared to violent, 23% and 22% respectively. Public order offences were the least in numbers, 9% only.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, age, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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