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Some people think that because of email and telephone, communication among people is less personal now than it used to be. Do you agree or disagree with that view? Use specific reason and example to explain to your answers.

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Undoubtedly technological advancement has changed our lives drastically. It is of concern whether emails and telephones have affected
communication
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 among
people
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. I disagree with
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, there are several advantages to modern
communication
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.Telephones allow
people
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 who are far apart to talk to each other at moments of convenience. It has breached the delays there were in
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 among
people
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 living in different parts of the
world
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 where it took several months for writing letters to get delivered.
People
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 are able to reach one another with the latest gossip in a matter of minutes.
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 shows how far the
world
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 has come. I'd say through
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,
people
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 are getting, even more, closer than they used to be in times of technological scarcity. Electronic mail
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 requires the internet to run. It
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 allows
people
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 to reach themselves within the shortest possible time. All that matters is a stable internet and an electronic device.
People
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 share learning materials
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 and send work-related information through
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 means. These modern ways of
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 have eliminated the need to travel to one place to facilitate
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 but rather have made the
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 into a global village.
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, rather than distancing
people
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, reaching others through telephones and electronic mail hasten
communication
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 and has brought the
world
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 closer than before.
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