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Some people believe that governments should ban dangerous sports. Others claim that they should have freedom to choose their favourite activities. Discuss both views and present your opinion.

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Over the years,
activities
 that are considered to be
sports
 have been evolving.
While
 a few of these games are relatively safe, others are considered not to be. A group of
people
 are of the opinion that those in authority should prohibit participation in sporting
activities
 which are harmful
whereas
 others argue that individuals should be free to engage in any kind of
sports
 that interests them. On
one
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 hand,
people
 have preferences when it comes to the
sports
 they love.
Therefore
, it will not be logical to restrict them to certain sporting
activities
. These
type
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 of restrictions may cause
people
 to lose interest in
sports
 totally.
For example
,
people
 from Asia enjoy martial arts ,
hence
, it may be counter-intuitive to prohibit them from participating in it.
Additionally
, the fear of a sporting activity causing harm can be eliminated by putting safety measures in place in order to minimize injury.
Conversely
, the effect of these "harmful" sporting
activities
 on the health of those who participate in it can be significant.
Due to
 their propensity to cause harm, they can cause pressure, concussion or contusion injuries to different parts of the body and these injuries can be
life altering
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.
For instance
, a study done among American rugby players noted a high
occurence
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occurrence
 of neurological disorders in these players
as a result
 of the frequent impact on their
head
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while
 playing the
sports
.
This
 may have been prevented if
people
 were prohibited from playing rugby. Despite the
arguements
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arguments
 stated above, I am of the opinion that
people
 should be allowed to partake in any
sports
 that they enjoy, albeit, with safety measures put in place to prevent any form of harm. In summary,
people
 in authority may work towards finding a balance between allowing
people
 their freedom when it comes to
sports
 and ensuring that the danger these
sports
 pose
are
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 reduced to their barest minimum or eliminated entirely.
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