Blood sports (any spots involving Killing or shedding of blood as bull fighting, cockfighting or hunting)have become hot topic for debate in recent years.as society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and cruel to the helpless animals that are killed.blood sports should be banned.TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

Some people argue that blood sports should be illegal. I strongly agree with their opinion because it not only hurts innocent
animals
,
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but
also
is against basic morality
rules
we have in our
society
. Talking about poor
animals
,
they
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get hurt a lot in
these kind
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of competitions without deserving it. After centuries of research, we now know that
animals
have emotional processing systems similar to us and
moreover
, they feel pain just like we do and it is considered highly cruel and cold-hearted to make them go through
such
misery just to entertain us.
However
, some people use how we kill and eat them as an excuse. To negate their point,
that is
exactly why we have protocols before killing these farm
animals
,
such
as giving them water and making the process as fast as it gets.
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,
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Islam we have a procedure called Zebh in which the animal is carefully killed in a sudden fashion, so it would feel less pain.
On the other hand
, our
society
is
also
taking hits from these
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of
rediculous
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activities.
Firstly
, promoting violence and blood-shed is the exact opposite direction of our civilization.
Instead
of teaching our kids about caring and having good will,
this
will stay in their
unconsious
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unconscious
mind and might
some
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day,
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itself in
shape
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of crime and hate.
Secondly
, even in our most brutal and violent
sports
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we make sure to respect the
rules
and maintain a level of morality
whereas
between
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animals
, there
is
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no
rules
.
For instance
,
the
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mixed martial arts or MMA has been around for a
while
and
although
two
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humans are put into a cage, they still have
rules
to follow and anyone who watches them fight is
also
aware.
Hence
, nobody is going to mistake our
society
for a jungle where humans drink other people's blood.
To conclude
, I believe it is completely insane and immoral to allow blood sports to continue their activities and we should
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all means, forbid them to stop
animals
from being abused and prevent the violence it is injecting
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the veins of our
society
.
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