The charts below show the percentageof water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pie Charts show the
water
consumption in various sector
in the specific six Fix the agreement mistake
sectors
region
all over the world.
we can see here North Change to a plural noun
regions
america
and Europe Change the capitalization
America
are
the highest Verb problem
have
water
user
in the industrial area Correct your spelling
use
whereas
others use
the most proporation in agriculture. Household usage rate is always lower comparing
those two.
Wrong verb form
compared to
In depth
, the statistics show that Europe spend 53% of their Add a hyphen
In-depth
water
and North America
is
48% Unnecessary verb
apply
while
other areas are showing this
rate under 12% or less in the purpose of Industrial use
. Besides
, Agriculture occupy
the highest sum of 88% in Central Change the verb form
occupies
Asia
. Africa and South East Asia
stand for 84% and 81% respectively. South America
has a percentage of 71% and North America
witnessed 32%, the least in this
purpose.
Domestic use
always shows the lowest water
use
percentage If we compare with
the other two sectors. Correct pronoun usage
it with
However
, South American people use
19%, and European
Replace the word
Europeans
use
15% of water
in the
household Correct article usage
apply
works
. The statistics Fix the agreement mistake
work
is
Change the verb form
are
same
for Central Correct article usage
the same
Asia
and South East Asia
. African rate of water
consumption for domestic use
is 9%, but the
North Correct article usage
apply
Americans
usage is 4% extra than Africa and stood at 13%.Replace the word
American
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