The charts below show the percentageof water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentageof water used for different purposes in

six areas of the world.

Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
These pie Charts show the
water
consumption in various
sector
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sectors
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in the specific six
region
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regions
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all over the world. we can see here North
america
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America
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and Europe
are
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have
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the highest
water
user
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use
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in the industrial area
whereas
others
use
the most proporation in agriculture. Household usage rate is always lower
comparing
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compared to
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those two.
In depth
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, the statistics show that Europe spend 53% of their
water
and North
America
is
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apply
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48%
while
other areas are showing
this
rate under 12% or less in the purpose of Industrial
use
.
Besides
, Agriculture
occupy
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occupies
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the highest sum of 88% in Central
Asia
. Africa and South East
Asia
stand for 84% and 81% respectively. South
America
has a percentage of 71% and North
America
witnessed 32%, the least in
this
purpose. Domestic
use
always shows the lowest
water
use
percentage If we compare
with
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it with
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the other two sectors.
However
, South American people
use
19%, and
European
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Europeans
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use
15% of
water
in
the
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apply
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household
works
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work
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. The statistics
is
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are
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same
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the same
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for Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
. African rate of
water
consumption for domestic
use
is 9%, but
the
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apply
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North
Americans
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American
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usage is 4% extra than Africa and stood at 13%.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, use, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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