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The line graph shows the percentage of people accessing news from 4 sources from 1995 to 2025

The line graph shows the percentage of people accessing news from 4 sources from 1995 to 2025
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This
 line graph
illustraites
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illustrates
 the proportions of people
use
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who use
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methods
 (TV, Radio,
Newspaper
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newspapers
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,
Internet
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and Internet
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) to access the news from 1995 to 2025.
Overall
,
internet
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the internet
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 showed to upward
trend
while
other
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the other
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 three
methods
showing
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showed
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downward
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a downward
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trend
 over the
period
. In 1995, TV, radio and newspaper had more than 50% of
proportion
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the proportion
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 to access the news.
However
, after 1995 all three
methods
 showed
downward
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a downward
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trend
 and
this
dawnward
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downward
trend
 will
predicted
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 to remain the same till 2025. TV started from just below 70% in 1995 and
then
 it went
dawn
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down
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 around 65% in 2000,
then
 in 2010 it showed
slight
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a slight
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 rose and
then
 it went down over the
period
. Newspaper and radio showed
the
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apply
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similar fluctuation during the
period
. Both were started in 1995
around
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at around
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 55% and
then
 continuously rose down around 30% in 2020. In 2025
also
they
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apply
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predicted these two
methods
 will go down
between
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by
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 30%-20%.
Finally
,
internet
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the internet
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 is the only source
had
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that had
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continuous rose
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continuously risen
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 over the
period
, which was started from 0% in 1995 and
then
showed
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showing
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 rapid
growing
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growth
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 till 2020 and in 2025, they will accept it will rise
until
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to
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 55%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words methods, trend, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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