The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart represents percentages by region and gender showing
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the worlds
worlds
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world
illiteracy
rates
for the last
year.
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the gender
it is clear that
female
are most Fix the agreement mistake
females
illiteracy
rated
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such
countries
as Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South Asia
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statistics
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regions proportion is less Correct article usage
the same
more
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apply
then
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per cent
countries
different
between Replace the word
difference
male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
is very small.
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females
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regions Correct your spelling
Comparing
it is clear that
in developed countries
illiteracy
rates
are much lower then
in other shown
worlds places in both groups male and female. Replace the word
than
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represents more Add an article
The statistic
then
50 Replace the word
than
percentages
less in developed Replace the word
per cent
countries
then
in South Replace the word
than
Asia
. Compering
East Correct your spelling
Comparing
Asia
and South Asia
it is clear that
male
are most equal, meanwhile Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
in South Fix the agreement mistake
females
Asia
have bigger illiteracy
rates
.
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illiteracy
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, rates, countries, asia with synonyms.
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