The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart represents percentages by region and gender showing
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worlds
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illiteracy
rates
for the
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gender
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diagram
it is clear that
female
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females
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are most
illiteracy
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in
such
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as Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
. Looking at male
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in
same
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the same
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regions proportion is less
more
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apply
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then
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20
percentages
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per cent
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. Meanwhile in Developed
countries
different
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difference
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between
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males
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and
female
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females
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is very small.
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regions
it is clear that
in developed
countries
illiteracy
rates
are much lower
then
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in other shown worlds places in both groups male and female.
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represents more
then
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50
percentages
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per cent
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less in developed
countries
then
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than
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in South
Asia
.
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Comparing
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East
Asia
and South
Asia
it is clear that
male
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males
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are most equal, meanwhile
female
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females
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in South
Asia
have bigger
illiteracy
rates
.
Bar
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chart
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that there are very big correlation between developed
countries
and other it
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illiteracy
rates
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, rates, countries, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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