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Your new neighbours have recently invited you to a party they are holding next Saturday. However, you have other plans on Saturday evening and cannot attend the party. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter: •Thank them for the invitation •Mention what plans you already have •Suggest when you can meet them

#neighbours #party #saturday #plans #•thank #invitation #•mention #•suggest
Dear Mr Smith, I am writing
this
 letter to thank you for inviting me
for
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the saturday
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saturday
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Saturday
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party
.I Really appreciate your gesture.
Its
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 been
long
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 time
to
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since to
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socialize
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 with you.
last
 time it was two months back. I would love to join the bash but I have some other commitments on
saturday
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Saturday
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 evenings. I have to attend my office
colleague
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 promotion
party
. that
party
 is
also
 on
saturday
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 evening
because
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 of that I will not be able to attend your
saturday
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party
.
The
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 colleague of mine is really close to me.
However
, I Would like to invite you
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to sunday
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sunday
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Sunday
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 25th
march
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March
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 2023
in
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my home. So that we can meet and have dinner together. it will be nice to host you for a dinner . As I
Iknow
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 you like
mexican
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Mexican
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rood
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food
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so
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we will have
mexican
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dinnner
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dinner
diner
 that day. I LOOK FORWARD TO HEARING FROM YOU. Yours Sincerely, BEN JOHNSON
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task achievement
Ensure clarity and avoid grammatical errors. For example, 'I would love to join the bash but I have some other commitments on saturday evenings' could be clearer as, 'I would love to join the party, but I already have commitments this Saturday evening.'
task achievement
Maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter. Although your tone is polite and friendly, it tends to be informal in some places like 'bash' and 'ROOD'. Consistency is key.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs more effectively to separate different ideas. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea.
coherence cohesion
Ensure proper capitalization and punctuation throughout the letter. For instance, 'I would like to invite you sunday 25th march 2023' should be 'I would like to invite you on Sunday, March 25th, 2023.'
task achievement
You expressed gratitude effectively, which shows good awareness of appropriate social conventions.
coherence cohesion
The overall structure of your letter is quite good, with a clear beginning, middle, and end.
task achievement
Your content is relevant and you have covered all parts of the task.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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