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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The maps illustrate the present and how it will look after the renewal of the university’s sports centre layout.
This
 plan is compared based on present and future maps, and it will be analyzed into 2 categories, which are the West and East placement.
Overall
, in the present, there are still a lot of capacities to improve their building.
Also
, it has many additional facilities and changes from outdoor to indoor in the future plan.
First,
on the West side, the outdoor courts would be changed into a leisure pool with an additional changing room for the people who want to change their clothes, specifically for swimming.
Furthermore
, there will be a sports shop for customers who want to see or buy some items and equipment.
In addition
, on the other side which is the East, there will
also
 be many changes in the outdoor courts.
Next,
The gym will be extended 2 times of their initial size. Next to it are the dance studios which are divided into 2 separate halls which are on the left and right. On top of that, there will be a sports hall in front of the right-side dance room as well. They will add another changing area for those who want to change their clothes before or after doing exercises. There will be a cafe on the right after the entrance door as well that could be useful for many who want to enjoy coffee or tea.
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