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You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

#work #company #advertisement #course #job
Dear Sir or Madam, I
write
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am writing
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this
 letter to let you know my concern
for involving
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about being involved
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 in the “Network Fundamental”
course
 that you have advertised before.
Firstly
, I would like to thank you for giving your employers
this
 opportunity, It will highly increase the skills and experiences of the
works
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work
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. I work in
Network
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the Network
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 operations
center
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 department and I want to
be involve
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be involved
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 with the network fundamental
course
, It
related
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 to our department and it will give me more knowledge about my job.
Also
, it will
make
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help
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 me enhance our work environment. As I
say
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 before,
this
course
 is very important to understand more details about our department. It will help to engage
further
 in our work. Generally, I am looking forward to
be
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 a part of
this
course
 to give you all
what
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that
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 I have and to improve our company's working environment. and
i
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I
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 hope for
replying
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me
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 to let me know about any updates. Sincerely, Mohammed Salih
Submitted by eng.mohamedsmh on

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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