the chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. write a report.

the chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

write a report.
The display chart shows the amount of
leisure
time
enjoyed by men
as well as
women of different
employment
status
.
Leisure
time
in a typical week: by sex and
employment
status
1998-1999 is employed full
time
, employed
part
time
, unemployed, retired,
as well as
housewives
.
Leisure
time
in a typical week: by sex and
employment
status
, 1998-1999. TheIn the males, employed full
time
is between 40-60, employed
part
time
is emty, unemployed is the highest more than 80, retired is around 80 and in
housewives
is emty. In the female, in employed full
time
is 40, employed
part
time
is nearly 40, in unemployed is 70, in retired is 70 and in
housewives
is 50.
To conclude
, the data is on house of
leisure
time
.
Leisure
time
in a typical week: by sex and
employment
status
is 1998-1999.
Employment
full
time
, employed
part
time
, unemployed, retired
as well as
housewives
.
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