The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the

marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting

the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The bar graphs
showed
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how many
Amercian
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American
people
got married and divorced from 1970 to 2000.
It is clear that
,
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the number of married
people
has gone down
since
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from
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1970 to 2000. But the couple who got divorced in 2000 maintained comparing with 1970.
Also
, amount of wives and husbands in 2000 decreased than 1970.
Firstly
, Married
people
in 1970 and 1980 were the same 2.5
million
.
However
started to fall in 1990 to 2.25
million
, even in 2000 down to 2
million
. Divorce couples slightly increased in 1980 to almost 1.5
million
, but those
people
fell to approximately 1
million
during the decade. In 2000, It was
slight
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decrease too.
Secondly
, The rate of
people
who experienced to get
wedding
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a wedding
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was 70 per cent in 1970. Meanwhile, in 2000, They decreased to a little less than 60 per cent. And the proportion of
people
that
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whose
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spouse died and was left alone in 1970 was about ten per cent, it had decreased in 2000.
In contrast
, the raion of divorced in 2000 rose dramatically by around 10
percent
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per cent
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than 2000. I'm going to
casino
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the casino
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tonight. If I get a lot of money. I will share it with my family. 😂 But I know never happened to me
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marriage rate
  • divorce rate
  • marital status
  • adult Americans
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • nadir
  • comparisons
  • notable
  • patterns
  • factors
  • social factors
  • distribution
  • significant differences
  • anomalies
  • speculate
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