The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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showed

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how many

Amercian

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American

people

got married and divorced from 1970 to 2000.

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the number of married

people

has gone down

since

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1970 to 2000. But the couple who got divorced in 2000 maintained comparing with 1970.

Also

, amount of wives and husbands in 2000 decreased than 1970.

Firstly

, Married

people

in 1970 and 1980 were the same 2.5

million

However

started to fall in 1990 to 2.25

million

, even in 2000 down to 2

million

. Divorce couples slightly increased in 1980 to almost 1.5

million

, but those

people

fell to approximately 1

million

during the decade. In 2000, It was

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decrease too.

Secondly

, The rate of

people

who experienced to get

wedding

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was 70 per cent in 1970. Meanwhile, in 2000, They decreased to a little less than 60 per cent. And the proportion of

people

that

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spouse died and was left alone in 1970 was about ten per cent, it had decreased in 2000.

In contrast

, the raion of divorced in 2000 rose dramatically by around 10

percent

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than 2000. I'm going to

casino

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the casino

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tonight. If I get a lot of money. I will share it with my family. 😂 But I know never happened to me

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