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The Importance of School Holiday Activities: School holidays often involve various activities, such as summer camps, educational trips, and extracurricular programs. How important are these activities in contributing to a student's personal development and academic success? Discuss with relevant examples.

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The importance of
school
holiday
activities
 is huge. The
activities
 are mostly summer
school
 and
lessons
which are improving
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different
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the different
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 skills of students and
making
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make
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 their brains work and warm up before the
school
 year.
School
holiday
activities
 are very significant. One key aspect is that they give additional training for the students and a better understanding of different topics. I was in summer
school
 many times and I took a lot of private
lessons
 in order to make myself remember the program and prepare early for next year. The
lessons
 that you take on the holidays are helping you to improve the subjects that you are bad at. I have the experience to say that I am more capable
to focus
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of focusing
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 on the
lessons
 after having some
activities
,
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 than having to do no work during the vacation or
holiday
. In conclusion, I can assure you that the
holiday
activities
 are very beneficial to students. They have the influence of a kickstart for the brain before the
school
 year and give
better
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a better
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 understanding of subjects that you are taking
activities
 on.
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