The pie chart explains what anthropology graduates chose for their path after graduation. In addition, the table describes the salaries of anthropologists after 5 years of their careers.

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Anthropology who finish university after receiving

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degree the table

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their job income after five years. The table shows three categories of employment who are active in freelance , government and individual companies.

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full time

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work has high popularity

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to other working time and on the hand, temporary work with postgrad study has

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5 % in the same quantities and private companies

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dual percentage . The next salary is between 50000 and 74999 , two groups have both 15 % and

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, around 50 %

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The pie chart explains what anthropology graduates chose for their path after graduation. In addition, the table describes the salaries of anthropologists after 5 years of their careers.

nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for companies and organization.

Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism of their teachers. Others think it will lead to a loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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