The pie chart explains what anthropology graduates chose for their path after graduation. In addition, the table describes the salaries of anthropologists after 5 years of their careers.
The chart degree the table
illustrate
Anthropology who finish university after receivingChange the verb form
illustrates
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a
present
their job income after five years.
The table shows three categories of employment who are active in freelance , government and individual companies. Correct subject-verb agreement
presents
According to
the table
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,table
full time
work has high popularity Add a hyphen
full-time
compare
to other working time and on the hand, temporary work with postgrad study has Change the form of the verb
compared
less
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fewer
favorites
.
In salary of bellow 49900 , Freelancers and government category Change the spelling
favourites
has
5 % in the same quantities and private companies Change the verb form
have
has
dual percentage .
The next salary is between 50000 and 74999 , two groups have both 15 % and Change the verb form
have
individulas
company has 35% of salary.
The Correct your spelling
individuals
individual
last
sector has higher income over than
100000 $ Correct word choice
apply
this
category has significant
increase in Add an article
a significant
compare
to other groups but freelance consultants Replace the word
comparison
has%
that Verb problem
have a percentage
remain
stable.
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remains
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, around 50 % Rephrase
In total
graduated
student has Change preposition
of graduated
full time
job and Add a hyphen
full-time
others
groups reached Correct quantifier usage
other
to
48 % .Change preposition
apply
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