The pie chart explains what anthropology graduates chose for their path after graduation. In addition, the table describes the salaries of anthropologists after 5 years of their careers.

The pie chart explains what anthropology graduates chose for their path after graduation. In addition, the table describes the salaries of anthropologists after 5 years of their careers.
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Anthropology who finish university after receiving
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degree the table
present
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their job income after five years. The table shows three categories of employment who are active in freelance , government and individual companies.
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table
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full time
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full-time
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work has high popularity
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to other working time and on the hand, temporary work with postgrad study has
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favorites
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. In salary of bellow 49900 , Freelancers and government category
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5 % in the same quantities and private companies
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dual percentage . The next salary is between 50000 and 74999 , two groups have both 15 % and
individulas
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individuals
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company has 35% of salary. The
last
sector has higher income over
than
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100000 $
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increase in
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to other groups but freelance consultants
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that
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stable.
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, around 50 %
graduated
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student has
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job and
others
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groups reached
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48 % .
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