The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and

locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts give the
inforamation
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information
about activities that
makes
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make
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people
aged under 30 and over 30
a
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happy.
To begin
with, it is indeed clear that achievement at work makes
people
most satisfied.
people
over 30
feels
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more pleased when they achieve their work
releted
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related
goals which
is
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are
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one
percent
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per cent
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more than
people
under 30 age.
Secondly
,
people
under 30 and mid-age
people
both enjoy
to pursue
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pursuing
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their hobbies which is 22% and 24% respectively.
On the contrary
,
mid-aged
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middle-aged
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people
feels
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feel
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happy when they acquire financial security
whereas
people
under 30
finds
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find
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joy in having a good appearance with almost 18%. fourteen
percent
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per cent
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people
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of people
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enjoy
to spend
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spending
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time with their family when they are in their
40's
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40s
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while
young aged
people
feels
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feel
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happy when they are travelling and exploring new places. If we see other factors which
is
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are
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not clarified
but
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it holds 10% of happiness in over 30 age and 12% in aged under 30
people
. All in all, work achievement and
pusuing
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pursuing
pushing
hobbies
makes
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make
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people
most happy
in
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at
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both
the
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apply
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ages.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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