The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts give the
inforamation
about activities that Correct your spelling
information
makes
Change the verb form
make
people
aged under 30 and over 30 a
happy.
Correct article usage
apply
To begin
with, it is indeed clear that achievement at work makes people
most satisfied. people
over 30 feels
more pleased when they achieve their work Change the verb form
feel
releted
goals which Correct your spelling
related
is
one Change the verb form
are
percent
more than Change the spelling
per cent
people
under 30 age. Secondly
, people
under 30 and mid-age people
both enjoy to pursue
their hobbies which is 22% and 24% respectively.
Change the verb form
pursuing
On the contrary
, mid-aged
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middle-aged
people
feels
happy when they acquire financial security Change the verb form
feel
whereas
people
under 30 finds
joy in having a good appearance with almost 18%. fourteen Change the verb form
find
percent
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per cent
people
enjoy Change preposition
of people
to spend
time with their family when they are in their Change the verb form
spending
40's
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40s
while
young aged people
feels
happy when they are travelling and exploring new places. If we see other factors which Correct subject-verb agreement
feel
is
not clarified Change the verb form
are
but
it holds 10% of happiness in over 30 age and 12% in aged under 30 Correct word choice
apply
people
.
All in all, work achievement and pusuing
hobbies Correct your spelling
pursuing
pushing
makes
Change the verb form
make
people
most happy in
both Change preposition
at
the
ages.Correct article usage
apply
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