The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given bar chart
provide
information about the way British citizen spent their money based on some age group Change the verb form
provides
on
3 main Change preposition
in
area
of spending in 2004. Change to a plural noun
areas
Overall
, for the oldest people the highest categories were belong
to food, drink and entertainment and the least was Restaurant and Hotel. Change the verb form
belonged
However
, for younf
Correct your spelling
young
people
Add a comma
,people
Restaurant
and Fix the agreement mistake
Restaurants
Hotel
become the prominent Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
area
of Fix the agreement mistake
areas
spent
.
Change the form of the verb
spending
According to
the data, although
most of the UK residents under 30 spend their earnings on Restaurant
and Hotel (almost 15%)Fix the agreement mistake
Restaurants
,
when they Remove the comma
apply
getting
older the number Wrong verb form
get
was plummeted
dramatically Change to the active voice
plummeted
has plummeted
almost
0 Change preposition
to almost
percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
However
, the number then
increase
gradually by 6% for those aged more than 76+.
Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
On the other hand
, citizen
under 30 only spent the least on Food, drink and entertainment Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
while
for the people aged 46 until 70, it was the most area of spending until reach
the peak, almost 25 % Wrong verb form
reached
spesifically
for those aged 61-76.Correct your spelling
specifically
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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