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the maps below shows the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighboring town, cinse 1962

the maps below shows the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighboring town, cinse 1962
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The maps clearly demonstrate how significant development was in two towns (
Meadowside
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 and
Fonton
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), which were neighbours to each other. It can be observed that in 1985, the land of
Meadowside
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 Village had been expanded and has become Suburbs. Currently,
Fonton
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 merged with Meawdowside. There were essential changes in infrastructure and buildings over the period given.
To begin
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 with, in 1962 both of the lands were empty, only in
Fonton
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 had a railway, which passed from southeast to northwest.
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, by 1985, there were significant improvements in transition and housing.
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, a considerable highway was constructed, which is connected to neighbouring towns ,
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moreover
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 it is noticeable that the road in the middle of
Meadowside
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 Village became narrow and modern.
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, on the west side of the Meadowise was built a housing estate
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 and leisure complex and in the south part of ,
land
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the land
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 there is a super-store.
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, the land of
Fonton
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 town became larger. Currently, both towns are connected in the new places constructed some infrastructures,
such
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 as a hotel, station in the middle and a business park in the south.
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, the
Meadowside
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 became Suburbs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meadowside, fonton with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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