the maps below shows the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighboring town, cinse 1962

the maps below shows the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighboring town, cinse 1962
The maps clearly demonstrate how significant development was in two towns (
Meadowside
and
Fonton
), which were neighbours to each other. It can be observed that in 1985, the land of
Meadowside
Village had been expanded and has become Suburbs. Currently,
Fonton
merged with Meawdowside. There were essential changes in infrastructure and buildings over the period given.
To begin
with, in 1962 both of the lands were empty, only in
Fonton
had a railway, which passed from southeast to northwest.
Secondly
, by 1985, there were significant improvements in transition and housing.
For instance
, a considerable highway was constructed, which is connected to neighbouring towns ,
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moreover
it is noticeable that the road in the middle of
Meadowside
Village became narrow and modern.
In addition
, on the west side of the Meadowise was built a housing estate
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and leisure complex and in the south part of ,
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there is a super-store.
Furthermore
, the land of
Fonton
town became larger. Currently, both towns are connected in the new places constructed some infrastructures,
such
as a hotel, station in the middle and a business park in the south.
Furthermore
, the
Meadowside
became Suburbs.
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