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Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#employers #job #applicants’ #skills #qualifications
In
this
 day and age, it is normally believed that social
skills
 are more essential than
qualification
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 when finding jobs. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
 opinion and
this
 essay will illustrate the reason for
this
 point of view. On the one
hand
, there are two main ideas why qualification is better.
To begin
with
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knowledge
 is the foundation in every
job
. Every
job
 requires basic
knowledge
 to get started
,
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 and to be able to develop
further
 and be successful in a
job
, candidates must have solid foundation
knowledge
 and have time to seriously study it. expertise to serve that
job
.
For
example
, a bank employee needs to have specialized
knowledge
 to accurately calculate interest rates on loans or customer savings. It would be terrible if a bank employee without accounting
knowledge
 incorrectly calculates the interest rate on customers' funds.
In addition
, a degree is
also
 seen in many places as evidence of a person's learning and professional abilities. Candidates with higher levels of education will create more sympathy for employers. A real-life
example
 is that a company may accept training someone who does not have many social communication
skills
, but they will not accept someone with poor professional ability.
On the other
hand
, social
skills
 are a necessary skill,
however
, if only social
skills
 are present, it will be difficult for a person to develop in the field they are interested in. A person always learns professional
knowledge
 before learning how to practice it.
For
example
, a doctor would not be able to perform an operation if he did not have expertise in surgery
,
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 and had a long period of study and observation. At that time he couldn't just talk and use his social
skills
 to help the patient. Another
example
, an office worker will not be able to complete his duties well if he does not have
knowledge
 about his profession and the field he is working in, even though he is sociable, friendly and skilled. Good communication
skills
 or good relationships with colleagues and bosses. In finding a
job
 with a good income, social
knowledge
 and qualifications are two things that always go
hand
 in
hand
 but learning is always the most important and irreplaceable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interpersonal dynamics
  • Adaptability
  • Teamwork
  • Networking
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Conflict resolution
  • Academic credentials
  • Technical expertise
  • Theoretical knowledge
  • Professional development
  • Career advancement
  • Specialization
  • Workplace harmony
  • Customer relations
  • Remote work
  • Digital communication
  • Job competency
  • Holistic assessment
  • Industry-specific skills
  • Work ethic
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