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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the work place. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whatever the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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Nowadays,
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it says to have a “piece of paper” because many companies hire only
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 have done the
university
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, but in only a few cases it is. Some
people
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 have different opinions
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university
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such
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people
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 think that universities should give the knowledge and skills for the workplace
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in other
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. In
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, first I’m a student that are studying mechanical engineering and I know it very well the system.
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, I believe that
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 have the possibility to go
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university
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must go
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because beyond that you learn things that go outside of knowledge.
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, you learn
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 to clean or like to cook,
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, I think that all
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college should study for
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 curiosity without many thoughts.
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, I’m studying mechanical engineering for my passion rather than study for to find a job. In my opinion,
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 important to choose a degree that in the future could open many doors,
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 in the world of work but without passion,
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 impossible to finish the patterns. Every year, a lot
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people
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 decide to do engineering but only a few reach the end.
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 say that each of us has a specific thought and
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 difficult to explain how to do something but the best solution is to hear anyone
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 knows more than us. In conclusion, I would maintain that tertiary education should be more content-specific and ensure the fastest and highest quality for its graduates. Not only will professionals be able to use their
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 knowledge as a catalyst towards their careers, but they will be able to make
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 out of it for a lifetime.
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