The pie chart below shows percentage of ad spending by different kinds of media in India fom 2012 to 2017

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The presented chart demonstrates the

percentage

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of ad spending of 6 various

media

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types between 2012 and 2017 in one specific country ,which is India. At first glance ,in both 2012 and 2017

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dominated other

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types with percentages of 43% and 45% respectively .The second most preferred

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type is print ,which

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not have

significant

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a significant

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rise between 2012 and 2017.There is a considerable increase

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digital

media

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which is

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9 where

it rose from 6% to 15%.The outdoor has remained the same with

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percentage

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the percentage

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of 5% in both 2012 and 2017

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The radio type has a

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of 7% and it is the third highest

media

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type in 2012.

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, in 2017 there

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a slight decrease by 3%.

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it is not possible to observe the

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of cinema but it can be said that it has the lowest

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in both 2012 and 2017.

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, there are some slight changes throughout the years but not all of them are considerable as large changes.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

167 words

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The pie chart below shows percentage of ad spending by different kinds of media in India fom 2012 to 2017

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In some countries, it can be difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience. What do you think are the causes and effects of this problem?

Many people around the world use social media everyday to keep in touch with other people and get news events. Do you think the advantages otweigh the disadvantages?

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day ? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?