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The pie chart below shows percentage of ad spending by different kinds of media in India fom 2012 to 2017

The pie chart below shows percentage of ad spending by different kinds of media in India fom 2012 to 2017
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The presented chart demonstrates the
percentage
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 of ad spending of 6 various
media
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 types between 2012 and 2017 in one specific country ,which is India. At first glance ,in both 2012 and 2017
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 dominated other
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 types with percentages of 43% and 45% respectively .The second most preferred
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 type is print ,which
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 not have
significant
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a significant
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 rise between 2012 and 2017.There is a considerable increase
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 digital
media
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 which is
9%where
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9 where
 it rose from 6% to 15%.The outdoor has remained the same with
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of 5% in both 2012 and 2017
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 The radio type has a
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 of 7% and it is the third highest
media
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 type in 2012.
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, in 2017 there
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 a slight decrease by 3%.
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 it is not possible to observe the
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 of cinema but it can be said that it has the lowest
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 in both 2012 and 2017.
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, there are some slight changes throughout the years but not all of them are considerable as large changes.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, media with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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