The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which was result from this energy use

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which was result from this energy use
The study illustrates how the
energy
being used in the Australian household, which is divided into two charts. The
first
chart
demonstrates how
energy
is used by his group of people
in
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an
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average, and the second
chart
shows the greenhouse gas
emissions
caused by using the mentioned
energy
types
in the
first
chart
.
Overall
,
according to
household
energy
types
, the heating sources generally
occupies
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more than 70% alone. In
case
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the case
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of greenhouse gas
emissions
, it is easy to notice that heating sources
also
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generate
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the greatest percentage
than
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the other sources of
vapor
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emission. From the
first
view on the
first
chart
, we will able to observe that different heating forms consisting of heating and water heating
takes
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more
that
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than
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two thirds
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of the
chart
, and the other
energy
types
are sharing in the
last
third together.
In addition
, the other appliances cause the largest amount of
energy
being used in the
last
third than the
last
three
types
of refrigeration, cooling and lighting. For the greenhouse gas
emission
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emissions
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, it seems that water heating and other appliances almost are equal in their
emissions
, and the same is seen between the heating and refrigeration
emissions
.
Finally
, as we observed in the
first
chart
, cooling and lighting
occupies
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occupy
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the lowest rates, where
also
cooling effect is larger than
lighting
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the lighting
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effect. By comparing between two charts, it is easy to notice that the largest effect is
seeing
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on water heating and other appliances increased in the second
chart
to take the place of heating.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, first, chart, emissions, types with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 9 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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