how does the map describe the change of village park ?

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The map below compares the differences between village parks 10 years ago and nowadays.

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the main field doesn’t change in size, it is obvious that some facilities are being replaced and expanded. Focusing on what was being removed, some areas in the past got replaced and some attractions have been added in the present. Previously, there was a pond and woods located at the south and southeast part of the park respectively. At the moment,

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area was replaced with some fresh entertainment like a bowling space, a cafe, toilets, and a picnic place.

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, there is an addition of a cycle path on the outer ring of the Village Park. Moving on to what has been enlarged, some areas have improved from some time in the past.

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, the children’s play field goes through expansion to become two sides children’s play area and children’s soft play space. The car park has

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improved its capacity from 20 vehicles to 50 vehicles for now.

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, the tennis court has

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doubled in size compared to 10 years before.

gabrichristieFri Sep 29 2023

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "improved" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

181 words

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how does the map describe the change of village park ?

As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Wealthy nations should asssit poorer countries with humanitarien relief during natural disasters

Organizing a large family celebrations, such as a wedding can often create problems. What can be the problems associated with organizing a large family event and what solutions can you suggest?

Anybody can use a mobile phone to answer work and personal calls at any time, 7 days a week. Does this development have more positive or negative effects on both individuals and society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people advocate death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe advantages and disadvantages of death penalty and give your opinion.