how does the map describe the change of village park ?

how does the map describe the change of village park ?
The map below compares the differences between village parks 10 years ago and nowadays.
Overall
,
although
the main field doesn’t change in size, it is obvious that some facilities are being replaced and expanded. Focusing on what was being removed, some areas in the past got replaced and some attractions have been added in the present. Previously, there was a pond and woods located at the south and southeast part of the park respectively. At the moment,
this
area was replaced with some fresh entertainment like a bowling space, a cafe, toilets, and a picnic place.
Moreover
, there is an addition of a cycle path on the outer ring of the Village Park. Moving on to what has been enlarged, some areas have improved from some time in the past.
For instance
, the children’s play field goes through expansion to become two sides children’s play area and children’s soft play space. The car park has
also
improved its capacity from 20 vehicles to 50 vehicles for now.
Finally
, the tennis court has
also
doubled in size compared to 10 years before.
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