The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map shows the town of GARLSDON and there are two possible sites for the supermarket. GARLSDON is a city with over 65,000 people, with many industries.
The best solution to build the supermarket is to put it in the centre of the city for many reasons.
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there is the town centre and there are many people who want to buy something. Linking Words
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there is the station and the main roads and for Linking Words
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is linked very well with other parts of the city. Linking Words
For instance
, people who live in Cransdon and Bransdon can reach supermarkets on the main roads.
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, the second solution is to put the supermarket in the west far of the centre and Linking Words
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could create some problems. There are many industries and Linking Words
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could lead to pollution and diseases. Linking Words
However
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place there is good transport, in ,fact to go to Hindon there is 12km.
Since the railway passes near Linking Words
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would be a better place in terms of communication as well.Linking Words
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