the bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014

the bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014
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The production and use of electricity, measured in
kWh
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, was demonstrated in the chart between ten states over a year period in 2014.
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, what stands out from the bar chart is that China headed the list with the USA,
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Brazil, Germany and Korea produced and consumed less
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electricity during the period in question. Looking at the details, in
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place was China with fabrication
5,398
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billion
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kWh
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and intake
5,322
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billion
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kWh
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, making it far more successful than the USA with generation
4.099
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billion
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kWh
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and consumption
3,866
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kWh
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. Ranked in third place was Russia with almost
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figures
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manufacturing and use, at 1,057
billion
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and 1,038
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, respectively. Next came Japan and India with a small difference, 936,2
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and 871
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kWh
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of production and 856,7
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kWh
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and 696,6
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of consumption.
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of the list was Germany, where the use is slightly higher than fabrication, with 582,5 and 526,6
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respectively,
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Korea produced 485
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and consumed 449
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kwh, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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