The graph below show the post-school qualifications held by canadians in the age group 25 to 35 and 45 to 55

The graph below show the post-school qualifications held by canadians in the age group 25 to 35 and 45 to 55
The pie charts demonstrate some main fields that Canadians aged between 25 and 35 (
group
A), and between 45 and 55 (
group
B), held their post-school qualifications.
Overall
, the number of Canadians aged from 25 to 35 holding a degree is more than twice compared to that of those aged from 45 to 55. The majority of the undergraduates from both
group
Change to a plural noun
groups
show examples
of people choose to
further
their education in Social Science and Arts. There were
also
increments in most of the sectors examined.
Firstly
, the proportion of students choosing Social Science and Art is the highest figures among the two groups, at 21% in
Group
A and 20% in
Group
B.
Submitted by viethoangnguyen0611 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: