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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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One
 of the most widely needed things in the whole world is education. It is undeniable that university students want to learn for their future, but there issue of whether pupils should study other
subjects
in addition
 to their particular or give all attention to qualifications. More people tend that, to young probably teenagers people better study only their main subject. For ,
this
 they point out that you will easily economise your
time
 since in university
time
 is
one
 of the vital things. Teachers who prolong their lessons, homework and some presentations will hold you in a rush.
Furthermore
, they say that being a master in
one
 thing is better than being basic in all things. When you give all your attention to the main subject
subsequently
 the result will be given all your income.
On the other hand
, when you give a little part of your
time
 to study other
subjects
 will help you.
This
 was evidence that having new knowledge will establish new brain neurons. Neurons give you an ability like a critical mindset and fast thinking.
Moreover
, of course, if you can hold 2 or 3
subjects
 in
one
 constant direction, they will not bother you. Since in ,future you may change your choice from
one
 subject and the
subjects
 you learn parallel to first will be the best decision for you In ,conclusion I want to say that studying only your field is better. Given that having a rest from university is
also
 good for you. No need to suffer and lose
time
, you are
also
 a human, even a teenager in most situations.
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