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The pie charts give information about the average household consumption in Japan and Malaysia in five categories.

The pie charts give information about the average household consumption in Japan and Malaysia in five categories.
The display pie chart gives data about the average household consumption in
Japan
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as well as
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Malaysia
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 in five categories housing,
transport
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,
food
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,
health
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care
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 and other
goods
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 and
services
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. The data is on average household consumption in
Japan
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 and
Malaysia
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. In
Japan
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, housing is 21%,
transport
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 is 20%,
food
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 is 24%,
health
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care
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 is 6% and other
goods
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 and
services
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 are the highest at 29%. In
Malaysia
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, housing is the highest with 34%, other
goods
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 and
services
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 is 26%,
food
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 is 27%,
transport
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 is 10% and
health
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care
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 is only 3%. There is a great difference between
Japan
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 and
Malaysia
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 and the highest difference is in
transport
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.
Food
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 and other
goods
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 and
services
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 are almost equal.
Health
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care
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 and
transport
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 are
also
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 equal.
To conclude
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, the above information describes the average household consumption in
Japan
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 and
Malaysia
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 in five categories housing,
transport
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,
food
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,
health
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care
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 and other
goods
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 and
services
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, malaysia, transport, food, health, care, goods, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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