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The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar charts illustrate the
number
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 of graduate and postgraduate
students
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 in the UK who did not go into full-time employment after completing their college in the year 2008.
Overall
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, in both graduated and postgraduate
students
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 the total
people
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number of people
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 who want to pursue higher studies is higher than part-time, voluntary work and Unemployment and the
number
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 of postgraduation
students
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 who did not go for a full-time job is significantly lower than undergraduates.
According to
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 the table,
further
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 studies are opted for by the majority of people which is around 2,700 postgraduates,
while
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 voluntary job seems to be an uncommon option as only 345 postgraduate
students
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 are working in that field. There are 2,535 people who are working part-time work and the rest of the 1,625 members are jobless. At nearly 30,000 graduates who continued on to
further
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 studies greatly outnumbered their counterparts who ended up in other situations. In comparison, only 3,500 graduates did voluntary work, making it the least common destination. Those who worked part-time and those who were unemployed were almost similar in
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.
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, the
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 of undergraduates who didn't go full-time is almost 10 times more than postgraduates in every position they chose after their degree.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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