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The diagram below shows how bricks are made. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The diagram below shows how bricks are made. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The chart displays the process of making
bricks
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 from the digging stage to
delivery
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the delivery
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 stage. In general, to have nice
bricks
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 for
building
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the building
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 industry, there are nine steps to manufacture. As is
give
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given
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 in the graphs, first of all, clay is mined from the ground and
then
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 stored in adequate places. After particle size is reduced in
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the roller
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roller
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the roller
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 machine, water is added. Next step, the clay is formed and cut to prepare for the coat and glaze. Once they are coated and glazed, they are continued to be
dryed
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dry
.
Finally
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,
bricks
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 are fired and cooled and
the
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in the
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last
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 step, the finished
bricks
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 are stored and shipped to be sold in the market.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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