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This letter your work officce does not have any cafteria for staff.

#work #officce #cafteria #staff
Dear Sir I hope
this
 letter is for you in radiant health and the best of spirit. I am writing
this
 letter with the crucial purpose of complaining, about I work office does not have any cafeteria for staff. I ask you to organize a cafeteria. On the one hand, in first important thing which should be mentioned is that
this
 is
also
 causing various inconveniences to the employees. Because some of our employees have some health problems and they usually need to eat fast, but our office does not have the conditions for
this
. On the other side, I hope that you will find a solution to
this
 soon because some of our workers are leaving work
due to
 the lack of a coffee shop, which is causing inconvenience to our office. So you will find a solution to
this
 soon, it is important to us.
Finally
, having given the previous facts , I hope you will take immediate action in order to solve the issue
as well as
 look forward to hearing from you in the future .
Thus
 do not hesitate to contact me. Yours faithfully Sarvinoz
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