The line graph shows the number of trips to other countries by UK residents for various purposes between 1989 and 2001.
The 2
shown
line chart represents the difference Verb problem
apply
of
journeys to some nations by Change preposition
in
the
British Correct article usage
apply
inhabitant
for contrary purposes over a period of 12 years from 1989 to 2001.
It's clear from the graph that the proportion of the residents Fix the agreement mistake
inhabitants
spent
their Correct pronoun usage
who spent
trips
on Holidays is higher than the trips
on business , family visitis
and other purposes.In terms of the total number of journeys, it Correct your spelling
visits
shown
the highest figure Wrong verb form
shows
consist
of 73.5 Wrong verb form
consisting
millions
in 1998 .
Change to singular
million
Overall
, the residents tend to choose the trip on holidays , it accounted the
highest percentages from 30 Change preposition
for the
millions
to 50 million Change to singular
million
trips
between 1989 and 1998 then
it went down sharply in
third consecutive years.
Regarding , the Change preposition
for
propotion
of Correct your spelling
proportion
inhabitans
chose the excursion on business Correct your spelling
inhabitants
increase
slightly from 9 to 10 million from 1989 to 1995 next it Wrong verb form
increased
fall
slowly Wrong verb form
fell
Fix the infinitive
to approximate
approximate
9 Change the word
approximately
millions
in 2001, Change to singular
million
Besides
,there was a steady increase in the quatity
of the resident chose the tour on Family visits from 5 Correct your spelling
quantity
quality
millions
in 1989 to 12 Change to singular
million
millions
in 2001. Change to singular
million
Finally
the trips
on
other purposes Change preposition
for
start
climbing moderately 4 to 8 Wrong verb form
started
millions
between 1989 and 1995 and decliningChange to singular
million
Change preposition
by
millions
in 2001.The public count of Change to singular
million
the
Correct article usage
apply
trips
rose sharply from 49 in 1989 to 73,5 millions
in 1998 Change to singular
million
finally
it decreased significantly in 2001 Correct word choice
and finally
with
61 Change preposition
to
millions
.Change to singular
million
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