The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given schemes illustrate the rate of males and females who were recruited in three different countries, namely,
Canada
, South
Korea
and
Sweden
in two years, 2005 and 2015.
Overall
, obviously, gentlemen were employed more than ladies in all given countries,
however
, in South
Korea
a tiny
percent
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of women had a job in comparison to
Sweden
and
Canada
. In 2005, in
Sweden
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the majority of men were recruited and their
number
accounted for an overwhelming 80%, which was almost twice as many as the
number
of women who worked in the same country.
On the contrary
, the
number
of employed males among the Canadians constituted 60%, which was almost 15% less than the
number
of males who had a job in South
Korea
. In 2015, there were similar patterns concerning the rate of employees among gentlemen in
Canada
and
Sweden
, which made up a hefty 70% each. Meanwhile, in
Sweden
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,Sweden
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every second woman was recruited,
although
, in South
Korea
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,Korea
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the
number
of employed ladies accounted for just over 30
percent
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per cent
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, which was almost one-half of the
number
of females that worked in
Canada
.
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