The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected chies for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australian water consumption for last year.

The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected chies for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australian water consumption for last year.
The bar chart illustrates the average Australian
water
consumption in selected cities for
last
year . And the pie chart shows the distribution.
Overall
, the most
water
consumption is in the Perth , and the rest is in the Canberra. And the most
water
distributed
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for agriculture.
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water
distributed
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to the mining, households,
manufactures
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and so on.
Water
consumption in
the
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Perth is 300
kilolitre
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kilolitres
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. In comparison with Canberra more than two hundred
kilolitre
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.
Another cities
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like Sydney , Melbourne and Adelaide used about 150-250
kilolitre
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of
water
. A lot of
water
is used to maintain
agricultures
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agriculture
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. Agriculture distribution is 67 per cent . In
comparison
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it is more than all others . Another the most distribution going to households , 9 per cent .
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