The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected chies for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australian water consumption for last year.
The bar chart illustrates the average Australian
water
consumption in selected cities for last
year . And the pie chart shows the distribution.
Overall
, the most water
consumption is in the Perth , and the rest is in the Canberra.
And the most water
distributed
for agriculture. Add a missing verb
is distributed
Another
Correct quantifier usage
Other
water
distributed
to the mining, households, Add a missing verb
is distributed
manufactures
and so on.
Replace the word
manufacturers
Water
consumption in the
Perth is 300 Correct article usage
apply
kilolitre
. In comparison with Canberra more than two hundred Fix the agreement mistake
kilolitres
kilolitre
. Change to a plural noun
kilolitres
Another cities
like Sydney , Melbourne and Adelaide used about 150-250 Replace the adjective
Another city
Other cities
kilolitre
of Fix the agreement mistake
kilolitres
water
.
A lot of water
is used to maintain agricultures
. Agriculture distribution is 67 per cent . In Fix the agreement mistake
agriculture
comparison
it is more than all others . Another the most distribution going to households , 9 per cent .Add a comma
,comparison
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