The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar charts give data on the gross figure of minutes in
billions
of phone tells in the UK, divided into local,
mobiles
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mobile
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,
and
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apply
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national and international over a period 7-year from 2001 to 2008. It can be seen from the graph that the integral quantity of minutes for
local
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the local
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sector
higher
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is higher
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than
other
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in other
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areas.
Also
, mobiles, national and international upward trend substantially. First of all, the count of minutes of telephone calls for mobiles had hit the highest point
about
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of about
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44
billions
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billion
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from 2 units in 2001 to 46 units in 2008. In terms of national and international, the two
region
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regions
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experience
significant
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a significant
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increase from 38 to 61
billions
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billion
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after 7 years. Looking at the graph more closely, we can see the number
calls
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of calls
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for local
rapidly
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growth from 72 to 90 units between 2001 and 2005.
Then
there
was
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suffered a
quickly declined
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with 84 and 72
billions
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billion
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for 2006 and 2008 respectively.
Overall
, the data in local still stayed the same
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  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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