The pie charts give information about the average household consumption in Japan and Malaysia in five categories.

The charts depict information about the average percentage of households in two countries in housing, transport, food, well-being and other goods.

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, it is noticeable that Malaysia obtained the largest percentage of housing,

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had the lowest proportion of energy care.

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with Japan, there was a negligible difference between housing and transport, namely 21 % and 20 %. In terms of food, it accounted for 24 % which is four times bigger than health care ( 6 %). The figure for other goods obtained the highest percentage of households in Japan throughout the period. With regards to Malaysia, the figure for strength care accounted for 3 % which is over 3 times smaller than transport ( 10 %).

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, it was the type of household which was less consumed over the period in question.

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, the rate for other goods and food shared a similar proportion, namely 26 % and 27 % .

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, housing was the kind of housing which was highly used throughout the period.

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